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Opening lines that really set the scene

Rosbif's picture

I'm sure there must have been threads about great opening lines here before. This is intended to be slight subset of that, inspired by the first song Drive-By-Truckers did on Later last week, Birthday Boy:

"Which one's the birthday boy?" she said, "I ain't got all night."

Why do I think this is a magnificent start to a song? Because it puts me right at the scene. From those twelve words, I can see the young man, pissed, horny and nervous; I can see his mates egging him on; I can see the woman, bored, hard-faced, wry - I can't see anything very clearly though, as the place is kinda dingy. I can smell the sweat and booze creating a fug in the room.

So what other songs manage that journalist's (or short story writer's) trick of setting up the scene with brilliant economy?

The whole song is an absolute stormer, by the way, and the band are superb: the three guitars, which add up to a tasty big sound without overwhelming; the drummer's swing and attack; and best of all, the bassist's minimalist buttin' in. The guy's voice isn't the greatest, but hey, give 'em a break...

3

Full stop

Kurt Vonnegut would write one worders e.g. Listen.
I can't remember the name of the film, but a troublemaker is warned "That attitude will get you in trouble someday"(sic)
followed by an instant punch to the face, and the words "Welcome to someday".Am I a bit off the thread here?

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stevieblunder | 20 May 2010 - 11:53am

Yes and no

I'm after songs, but hey, the film line sounds great - is it actually the first line of the film?

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Rosbif | 20 May 2010 - 1:36pm

RT...

Oh says Red Molly to James "That's a fine motorbike
A girl could feel special on any such like"

1952 Vincent Black Lightning

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Patrick Crowther | 20 May 2010 - 2:22pm

Yes

lovely

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Stephen Merrick | 20 May 2010 - 11:03pm

Not specifically the opening lines

but America by Simon and Garfunkel is my favourite story song. Hitch hiking through New Jersey, the Greyhound bus, looking at the other passengers and wondering if they are spies. The boy and Kathy, are they just friends or perhaps more? The days when you could smoke on the bus even. A lovely song but then he wrote so many.

Another favourite is Billy Joel - Theme from an Italian restaurant.

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Steve Turner | 20 May 2010 - 2:47pm

with you absolutely on "America"

brings a lump to the throat every time

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Timmie The Dog | 20 May 2010 - 3:04pm

"Kathy I said, though I knew she was sleeping"

"I'm empty and aching and I don't know why/Counting the cars on the New Jersey turnpike.."

Sheer genius. I always thought the narrator and Kathy were two kids in love, from smalltown America running away to the big city together. That naive playfulness early in the song ("Laughing on the bus..."), the quiet evening ("The moon rose over an open field") and then, the narrator's gnawing, rising apprehension and panic at the commitment he has made to leave his safe childhood behind and join the cars on the NJ Turnpike in 'looking for America"

It has had me bawling by the end on many occasions!

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Slotbadger | 22 May 2010 - 6:19pm

It's difficult to top

"It was in the afternoon of my eighty-first birthday, and I was in bed with my catamite when Ali announced that the archbishop had come to see me." in 'Earthly Powers' by Anthony Burgess

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WarwickHunt | 20 May 2010 - 3:02pm

i vote for this

^^^

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Glenbervie | 20 May 2010 - 11:27pm

weird

I was just thinking of that very line.

A few lines later he writes that he has clearly, "lost none of my old cunning in the contrivance of what is known as an arresting opening."

Great book

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Nick Duvet | 21 May 2010 - 12:07pm

PSB - West End Girls

Sometimes you're better off dead.
There's a gun in your hand
and it's pointing at your head.

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cathtrish | 20 May 2010 - 3:11pm

More RT - Hand Of Kindness

Well I wove the rope and I picked the spot
Well I stuck out my neck and I tightened the knot

And they say it's all Doom and Gloom with him! Mind you, that album has the wonderful Tear Stained Letter on it...

It was three in the morning when she took me apart
She wrecked the furniture, she wrecked my heart
She danced on my head like Arthur Murray
The scars ain't never going to mend in a hurry

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JimmyJimmy | 23 May 2010 - 12:19am

The answer, as always...

...is The Hold Steady. Well, always if you're me. I think Craig Finn is the best lyricist working today, bar absolutely none.

Charlemagne In Sweatpants:
When he's holding, then the streetlights seem an awful lot like spotlights.

Hot Soft Light
I was not involved down at the Northtown Mall.
As a matter of fact, I didn't even know that's where it happened.

Your Little Hoodrat Friend
Your little hoodrat friend makes me sick,
But after I get sick I just get sad.
Because it burns being broke and it hurts to be heartbroken,
But always being both must be a drag.
She's been calling me again.

First Night
Charlemagne shakes in the streets
And Gideon makes love to the suites.
Holly's not invincible -
In fact, she's in the hospital
Not far from that bar where we met
On that first night.

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Bob | 20 May 2010 - 3:27pm

Stay positive

Woh-haugh-haugh..Woh-haugh-haugh....

This is the first line I heard by the mighty Hold Steady. I seem to recall it was on a podcast of a gig in Washington DC. I was an instant convert.

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jingard | 25 May 2010 - 10:38am

It was the third of June, another sleepy, dusty Delta day

I was out choppin' cotton and my brother was balin' hay
And at dinner time we stopped and walked back to the house to eat
And Mama hollered out the back door "Y'all remember to wipe your feet"
And then she said "I got some news this mornin' from Choctaw Ridge
"Today Billy Joe MacAllister jumped off the Tallahatchie Bridge"

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Olthwaite | 20 May 2010 - 3:27pm

When you came in the air went out

...is the cracking first line from Jace Everett's 'Bad Things' (theme from True Blood).

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drakeygirl | 20 May 2010 - 3:42pm

"This is...

a public service announcement... With geetar"!
Blam!

The Clash ~ Know Your Rights

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James Blast | 20 May 2010 - 4:33pm

Eef Barzelay

Ballad Of Bitter Honey;

'That was my ass you saw
bouncing next to Ludicris
It was only on screen for a second
but it's kinda hard to miss'

or words similar

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happy harry | 20 May 2010 - 5:02pm

Set 'em up , Joe

SONG: "It's a quarter to three, there's nobody here 'cept you and me, so set 'em up, Joe," followed by a song about a lonely drunk.

FILM: "As far back as I can remember, I always wanted to be a gangster", followed by a film about a gangster remembering how he was a kid who turned into a gangster.

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Archie Valparaiso | 20 May 2010 - 4:55pm

You could hear the offbeats pound

as they raced against the ground...............

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Lunaman | 20 May 2010 - 5:17pm

Come on people!

What song?? Same to you above Archie. We're not all encyclopedic...

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Rosbif | 20 May 2010 - 10:38pm

Archie's....

...are "One For My Baby (And One For The Road)" by Frank Sinatra, and "Goodfellas".

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Bob | 21 May 2010 - 11:16am

A bit of fun really

'Ernie the fastest milkman in the west'.
An old favourite of mine.
I love sticking this on the jukebox in my local mid evening on the odd Friday evening.

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Lunaman | 21 May 2010 - 1:18pm

By the time I get to Phoenix..

she'll be rising

Country music is so good at the self-contained three-minute drama, see also Ode to Billie Joe above. Or Lucille by Kenny Rodgers. Or Jolene by Dolly Parton. The list goes on.

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Declan | 20 May 2010 - 6:01pm

The screen door

The screen door slams.....and in two lines Bruce sets up Thunder Road and the whole story.

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sitheref2409 | 20 May 2010 - 6:18pm

I have fallen for another...

...she can make her own way home.

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Richie B | 20 May 2010 - 6:28pm

Joni

- in her golden phase almost everything sounded like the opening of a novel or a movie

"He bought her a diamond for her throat
He put her in a ranch house on the hill..."

"The Hissing of Summer Lawns"

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Sheev | 20 May 2010 - 8:21pm

A few scenesetters from a brace of Word Marmite artists

Decemberists

Heart-carved tree trunk, Yankee bayonet, a sweetheart left behind (Yankee Bayonet)

teenage love, a civil war setting and loss in 10 words

And under the boughs unbowed, all clothed in the snowy shroud (Crane Wife 3)

Pride, winter, menace and death.

I’m made of bones of the branches, the boughs, and the browbeating light, while my feet are the trunks and my head is the canopy, high (The Queen's Rebuke)

...er...a big tree person. He does love his boughs, does Colin.

Bowie

It's safe in the city, to love in a doorway, to wrangle some screams from the walls (Sweet Thing)

Dystopia, fear, sex, anarchy

Wake up, you sleepy head, put on some clothes, make up the bed" (Oh, You Pretty Things)

Pretty much what it says on the tin, really.

Lately, I've been breaking glass in your room again. (Breaking Glass)

Unease, mental illness - it's the "again" that's the killer detail, as well as being a cheeky rhyme for "been"

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nicktf | 20 May 2010 - 8:39pm

Setting the scene....

'Well I was rolling down the road in some cold blue steel
I had a bluesman in the back and a beautician at the wheel'

Oh yes.

Courtesy Gibbons/Hill/Beard

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Pilleus Jr | 20 May 2010 - 10:50pm

B-Movie

"Well the first thing I'd like to say is, mandate my ass"

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Kit Hogue | 20 May 2010 - 11:04pm

Sad Eyed Lady of the Lowlands

With your mercury mouth in the missionary times
And your eyes like smoke and your prayers like rhymes
And your silver cross, and your voice like chimes
Oh, who do they think could bury you ?

Mercury mouth - how much more can you say with just two words?

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Adhoc Man | 20 May 2010 - 11:10pm

Jesus died for somebody's sins

but not mine.

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StuartReeves | 20 May 2010 - 11:24pm

It was a hot afternoon, the last day in June

the sun was a demon.

and

Reluctantly crouched on the starting line, engines pumping and thumping in time.

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milkybarnick | 20 May 2010 - 11:47pm

formative cinema

long shot of jungle, whup-whup-whup-whup of helicopters, smoke, sitar-like guitar playing, percussion cuts in, bass cuts in, Jim Morrison cuts in singing "This is the end..." and the treeline explodes into flame, Martin Sheen's face is superimposed and finally, after more than four minutes, you hear the first dialogue: "Saigon, shit, I'm still only in Saigon.."

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Glenbervie | 20 May 2010 - 11:51pm

Jagger/Richards

"Gold Coast slave ship bound for cotton fields"

Political correctness aside, the song opens with short, sharp, percussive fricatives as descriptors - in perfect symmetry with the angular riff. Fires the imagination and inflames the senses. A perfect lesson in the objective correlative.

ibid. Professor Sheev. A. Shilly-Arsh: Stupid Girl. Corruption and The Romantic Ideal in the Work of The Rolling Stones: University of Nellecote Press.

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Sheev | 21 May 2010 - 9:29am

Pistol shots ring out in a bar room night

Enter Patty Valentine from the upper hall

You just know this is going somewhere good.

Journalist: No one would have believed, in the last years of the nineteenth century, that human affairs were being watched from the timeless worlds of space.

It's as much Richard Burton's voice as what he says, but it just chills. And just about everyone now has the sound of strings running through their mind.

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Sam Fiddian | 21 May 2010 - 10:20am

Kid Charlemagne

While the music played you worked by candlelight
Those San Francisco nights,
You were the best in town
Just by chance you crossed the diamond with the pearl
You turned it on the world
That's when you turned the world around

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Nick Duvet | 21 May 2010 - 12:10pm

the rain

Falls down on a humdrum town.This town has dragged you down...
You just know it's fucking grim up north and the Scissors Sisters are two decades away....

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Vorgongod | 21 May 2010 - 12:12pm

A story's about to unfold.............

Rockafeller Drugstore Blues (Felice Brothers):
The exhaust from the prison van's going to heaven
But I'm going to Attica
Gonna put a hundred miles
Between me and my dealing habit

Hungry Heart (Springsteen):
Got a wife and kid in Balitmore Jack
I went out for a ride and I never went back

Ain't Living Long Like This (Waylon Jennings):
I looked for trouble and I found it son
Straight down the barrel of a lawman's gun

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Burnt_Face_Jake | 21 May 2010 - 12:51pm

Tom Waits

What's he building in there? What the hell is he building in there? He has subscriptions to those magazines. He never waves when he goes by. He's hiding something from the rest of us.

What´s He Building? by Tom Waits.

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Ola Claesson | 21 May 2010 - 1:31pm

I love Tom!

And I love the opening lines to Tom Traubert's Blues:

I'm wasted and wounded
And it ain't what the moon did

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mikechurch | 23 May 2010 - 9:06am

Off the new Gil Scott-Heron album

"Standing in the ruins of another black man's life..."

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spt | 21 May 2010 - 1:36pm

The Dame

"It's a God awful small affair, said the girl with the mousey hair"

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Six Dog | 21 May 2010 - 1:46pm

First Lines

Book: 'It was a cold bright day in April, and the clocks were striking thirteen...'

Song: ' I could have been most anything I put my mind to be, but a cowboy's life was the only life for me..'

Film: 'Red Three-Six, this is Red Three-Six Alpha ... we are taking automatic weapons fire from our right flank. Request support from Cold Steel Cobra...' fades into Philip Glass' majestic theme tune.

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policybloke1 | 21 May 2010 - 2:38pm

night hangs on the city like a blanket on a cage

Big Country - Porrohman

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another Iain | 21 May 2010 - 2:47pm

"Well, did you ever wake up with them bullfrogs on your mind?"

Bullfrog Blues - Rory Gallagher. Brilliant!

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Baskerville Old Face | 21 May 2010 - 3:06pm

Neil Finn

'The hangman's in the noose
The prisoner is loose'

- from 'Twisty Bass'

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Jon | 22 May 2010 - 5:59pm

Plaistow Patricia

"Arseholes, bastards fucking cunts and pricks..."

Always a pleasure.

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Slotbadger | 22 May 2010 - 6:28pm

Down In The Tube Station

The distant echo of faraway voices boarding faraway trains
To take them home to the ones that they love and who love them forever . . .

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mikechurch | 22 May 2010 - 7:26pm

Another of Weller's

"sup up your beer and collect your fags,
there's a row going on down near Slough"

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scottrae | 22 May 2010 - 8:48pm

Mr Dury

"I come awake with the gift for woman kind,
you're still asleep but the gift don't seem to mind"

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Dave Amitri | 22 May 2010 - 9:24pm

Robert Wyatt - Moon in June

On a dilemma between what I need and what I just want

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Roy Levy | 22 May 2010 - 10:58pm

Pistols and Chuck

"I am an antichrist, I am an anarchist"
"It was a teenage wedding and the old folks wished them well"

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King Sweeney | 22 May 2010 - 11:25pm

Squeeze - Up the Junction

'I never knew it could happen
with me and this girl from Clapham'

Scene set for unplanned pregnancy tale.

One of the greatest rhymes appears a bit further on :

Incubator/thirty minutes later

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Austin | 23 May 2010 - 12:41am

Ha!

Is it possible that this is the only name check Clapham has ever got in popular culture?

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Ola Claesson | 23 May 2010 - 10:37am

Ooh, ooh, another Squeeze, please

She was frigid like the bible
When she met her boyfriend Michael
He took her in his Zephyr
Where they sat like salt and pepper

Slap and tickle

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drakeygirl | 23 May 2010 - 9:47am

A punctured bicycle on a hillside desolate...

Will nature make a man of me yet?

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Dave Holley | 24 May 2010 - 10:49am

Marie Provost did not look her best...

...The day the cops bust into her lonely nest. In the cheap hotel upon Hollywood West. July 29 .

What follows is a genius piece of black humour reportage about the sad true life suicide of a Hollywood silent movie starlet - and the unfortunate doggy-related chapter that followed

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Ricardo | 25 May 2010 - 3:14am

Nick should have cities named after him

Pure class. Thanks for posting!

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Ola Claesson | 25 May 2010 - 10:22am

I don't like you but I love you


is just one of Smokey Robinson's great lines

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magneticfields | 25 May 2010 - 1:16pm

"The Love I Saw in You Was Just a Mirage"

There you were, beautiful.
The promise of love was written on your face
You led me on with untrue kisses
and held me captured in your false embrace

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Sheev | 25 May 2010 - 5:35pm

Dearly beloved...

...we are gathered here today to get through this thing called life.

My wish was to walk down the isle to this wearing purple DM's!

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Jules_Nile | 25 May 2010 - 2:22pm

Was (Not Was)

"At night only crickets. No prowlers, no sirens."

From 'Somewhere in America (There's a Street Named After My Dad), off the What Up Dog? album.

That's one of my all-time favourites.

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Mike_H | 25 May 2010 - 9:55pm

When you hear the air attack warning

You and your family should take cover

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FakeGeordie | 25 May 2010 - 11:30pm

Here's a few

It's one o'clock and time for lunch. Bom-de-bom-de bom.

Well she was just seventeen, you know what I mean.

The British police are the best in the world, I don't believe one of these stories I've heard.

There's only one way of life and that's your own, that's your own, that's your own.

War. What is it good for? Absolutely nothing.

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Thomas the Rhymer | 25 May 2010 - 11:41pm

Bit late with this one

Song:

The festival was over and the boys were all planning for a fall
The cabaret was quiet except for the drilling in the wall
The curfew had been lifted and the gambling wheel shut down
Anyone with any sense had already left town
He was standing in the doorway looking like the Jack of Hearts.

Book:

Call me Ishmael

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BigJimBob | 26 May 2010 - 7:07pm

Al Stewart could pen a decent scene-setter

Go and tell Lord Grenville that the tide is on the turn,
It's time to haul the anchor up and leave the land astern,
We'll be gone before the dawn returns,
Like voices on the wind...

or

On a morning from a Bogart movie,
In a country where they turned back time,
You go strolling through the crowd like
Peter Lorre contemplating a crime...

or

It was late in December, the sky turned to snow
All round the day was going down slow
Night like a river beginning to flow
I felt the beat of my mind go
Drifting into time passages
Years go falling in the fading light
Time passages
Buy me a ticket on the last train home tonight

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DougieJ | 26 May 2010 - 10:22pm
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